Step: It actually perks up into decent (did he let someone review it for him?) at Chapter 10, I'm at the point where, if anyone wants to check it out from curiousity, I'll say "Start with Chapter 10, use the glossary if you have to because he has a strong habit of verbing nouns and using the Humpty Dumpty Rule of Definitions. THEN start at the beginning."
I'm giving it a break for the moment, too tired at night to struggle. A few months back I read John Dalmas' "The Reality Matrix" and while I wasn't wild about the writing style, I found the ideas interesting - and got some fun out of the triggering events of the story happening right at a spot I drove past very frequently on the Grapevine (the part of I-5 that takes you out of the LA Basin and into the Central Valley of CA.) And oddly, that spot had an odd enough feel to me that I could almost believe what he wrote about it.
Now I'm reading his "The Regiment" which happens in the far, far future, fleshing out the ideas (in my opinion) that he touched on in "The Reality Matrix." Much cleaner, much more engrossing adventure, I'd recommend it especially for anyone who's well versed in Zen Buddhism, or the martial arts styles that strongly emphasize the process between your ears over gross physical strength or speed.
(But I'd recommend the same for suggesting Steve Perry's "The Man Who Never Missed" and its associated series of books.)